Monday, June 10, 2013

Excellent Exam Essay Samples

Another portrayal of how Prufrock's self worth is lowered is through is self-depreciative nature. After a line break, Prufrock explains, "No! I am not Prince Hamlet, nor was meant to be." in his own life, Profrock still feels that he is not the main character, shown through his allusion to Shakespeare's Hamlet. Rather than believe his the Adonis to his someone, he believes that his simply alive to benefit others rather than himself. He additionally protests that he is "no prophet and here's no great matter." This backing his belief that he is simply ordinary and not a life that will result in changing others. This sense he has that he is not important is again a cause of his self worth being lowered. 

-Cullen Ogden

Ideas that are articulated through body paragraph format. Offers much evidence for support, and is clear through use of both giving context and follow up comment as to the effectiveness of the quote. High formal diction is mostly used. Topic sentence uses a transition to remind the reader of the thesis and redirect toward the subtopic that will be discussed.

      In the poem, The Lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock, the poet T.S. Eliot uses the character Prufrock to illustrate that modern men have a mindset in which they are afraid of what others think of them. 
     Modern men, according to Eliot, are fearful of how they are viewed by others, and worry about being not only judged but also misunderstood. In the poem, J. Alfred Prufrock is wanting to ask a question that he is afraid to hear the answer to, and does not know how to pose it. He says, in Stanza 9, lines 7 and 8, "And how should I then presume and how should I begin?" Eliot conveys the modern man, Prufrock's hesitance by ...
     ...Prufrock, or the modern man, is not capable of blatantly blurting out what he means because of the innate fear of being misunderstood. The poet makes light of the fact that modern men are not necessarily afraid of material things such as guns or a lack of money, but that their plight is psychological, such as the fear of being judged by others. 

-Yoonjie Park
Language is in high formal diction and yet easy to follow through use of organized argumentation. A sense of control and understanding of deep implications of the poem is demonstrated.

Wordsworth is at once mesmerized by the magnificence of the urban environment. He establishes this reverence from when he first mentions the city in line 4 by expressing that "This City now doth, like a garment wear / the beauty of the morning, silent. bare." Wordsworth molds the city as a sacred environment by adding life to the inanimate city through personification. his choice to clothe the city with "The beauty of the morning" alos gives the impression that this beauty would ware off during the day and be redressed in the following morning. This conveys the sense that the city will hold its beauty eternally, but that this moment he is sharing the city is sacred nonetheless. He also expresses the city's many infrastructures as lying "open unto the fields and to the sky". Wordsworth deviates form the norm of describing the urban environment as one that causes claustrophobia and rather conveys the sense of freedom in the city through his use of "open" and "sky". he is able to find relieve in the setting itself. Through connect thing urban environment and juxtaposing it with the natural, he also touches on the fat that ...
     Wordsworth shows both his appreciate and irritation on the urban setting through his poem 'Composed Upon Westminster Bridge'. His description fo the beauty of the city in the octet then his frustration in the sestet, it is obvious that he desire to remind the people of London of their ignorance for the beauty they are surrounded by. Pople have become so accustomed t the setting that they have become blind. Words worth makes light of this aspect of the human condition in which conditions bestowed upon for a long time are soon forgotten and unappreciated." 

-Hye Joon Lee
The writer takes a close look at the text to arrive at interpretation. Presentation is organized and concise. High formal diction is used, as if the writer is familiar with the use of it.

     "One of the most ironic events in literature is when two enemies are drawn together and form an alliance. Shakespeare, however, drafts the ultimate ironic alliance when in his drama, 'Much Ado About Nothing' pulls Benedick and Beatrice together to fall in love with one another beling self-proclaimed bachelors. 
     An example of the irony between Benedick and Beatrice is their stance on marriage. ..."

-Ben Kim
Nearly every sentence in Ben's essay is purposefully constructed according to the organized argumentation model. Concise and poignant.

There were several more of you that did a splendid job writing your essays. Unfortunately I did not have the chance to type them all up. =)

Monday, May 27, 2013

Tuesday, May 28th


1. Missing blog comments were pointed out to students. Show Mrs. Lee work no later than Wednesday for grade update.

2. We finished our powerpoint and analyzed a two advertisements.

Advertisement Vocab / Terms:
1. Salient Feature
2. Photo Crop
3. Color Contrast
4. Color Meaning
5. Text Placement
6. Text Vector
7. Allegory
8. Efficacy
9. Audience
10. Purpose
11. Content


Evaluate the advertisement below for audience, purpose and content in 150 words or more. Turn in a hard copy in class. Use the terms and vocab familiar to visual rhetoric analysis. Also use vocab familiar to text analysis (conveys, suggests, infers, implies, connotes, underscores, makes light of, etc.).

Students who still need to take scansion quiz:
Section 3:

Section 4:

Comment on homework handed on for previous class:

Section 3: Comments are restricted to reaction to the video rather than close reference to what is actually going on in the video. Make sure to answer the question, then POINT OUT WHAT IS GOING ON IN THE VIDEO so you can closely analyze the use of it. A description of a piece with no reference to it is like reading an with no quotes or analyzation. Also many have not turned this work in.


Vocab Words Just for Fun (Fun, you say? Yes. Fun.)

This word may be helful in reference to J. Alfred Prufrock
from Word of the Day
This word may be used when describing the tone of language used in an advertisement. 
from Word of the Day

Thursday, May 23, 2013

Thursday, May 24th

Students who STILL need to take the Scansion Quiz:

Section 3:

Section 4:
Daniel Choi (C2 - 015 /conference room)
Brian Oh (C3 - 015)

Note: June 3rd, A5 (section 4) will meet in room 109 for class instead of 015 for final IGCSE examinations. Thank you for your flexibility.

Tuesday, May 21, 2013

Wednesday, May 22nd


Today we had a class discussion regarding the worksheet on Benedick and Beatrice on Love.

Question you should be prepared to answer for your final: What is striking, ironic, comedic, romantic about Beatrice/Benedick's perspectives on relationships throughout the course of the play, Much Ado About Nothing. Be sure to make close and detailed reference to the text. Also, why does the aspect Beatrice/Benedick's perspective have an affect you?

Completed worksheet with two colors of pen (one for the work completed at home, one for the extra notes you have taken in class) for points.


Statistically, you are bombarded with 5,000 ads a day. Take a picture of one that you find the most striking. Bring a hard copy of it on Friday.

Students who have yet to take the Scansion Quiz:

Section 3:
Craig (A2)
Daniel Lee
Tommie (A2)

Section 4:
Daniel Choi
Brian Oh

Students who need to turn in a completed Benedick and Beatrice on Love worksheet: 

Section 3: 
Brian Lee
William Paek
Brian Rhee

Tuesday, May 14, 2013

Wednesday, May 15th


1. We talked about how to use "Shakespearean Language", rewriting our own sentences using the following rules: 


How to Talk Like Shakespeare

  1. Instead of you, say thou or thee (and instead of y’all, say ye).
  2. Rhymed couplets are all the rage.
  3. Men are Sirrah, ladies are Mistress, and your friends are all called Cousin.
  4. Instead of cursing, try calling your tormenters jackanapes or canker-blossoms orpoisonous bunch-back’d toads.
  5. Don’t waste time saying "it," just use the letter "t" (’tist’will, I’ll do’t).
  6. Verse for lovers, prose for ruffians, songs for clowns.
  7. When in doubt, add the letters "eth" to the end of verbs (he runneth, he trippeth, hefalleth).
  8. To add weight to your opinions, try starting them with methinks, mayhaps, in sooth orwherefore.
  9. When wooing ladies: try comparing her to a summer’s day. If that fails, say "Get thee to a nunnery!"
  10. When wooing lads: try dressing up like a man. If that fails, throw him in the Tower, banish his friends and claim the throne.

Shakespeare's Pronouns

Elizabethan English used a different pronoun set than we’re used to.
The first person—I, me, my, mine—remains basically the same.
The second person singular (you, your, yours) is translated to:
  • “Thou” for “you” (nominative)
  • “Thee” for “you” (objective)
  • “Thy” for “your” (genitive)
  • “Thine” for “yours” (possessive)

Other Shakespearean Vocab can be found here.


1. Write a comment below referring to your plans this summer of 50-75 words using Shakespearean language.  

2. Read Act 2 Scene 1 lines 160 to 257 (2.1.160-257) of Much Ado About Nothing. 


Sunday, May 12, 2013

Monday, May 13th


Final Wrap-up discussion on "Love-song".

Poem Full Text 


Read the summaries on Much Ado About Nothing found on the following two websites:


By your own design, create a character web, organizing the characters by relationships. Also give a brief description of distinguishing character traits, actions in the play or agenda for each character. 20 points. You will be graded by reference to the story and neatness. Reference should be accurate, often, and indicate the Act in which the action in reference takes place.

DUE MAY 17th via email. Digital design and hand-drawn are both acceptable formats. However, if you hand draw your submission, scan it as a PDF and send it to my email address.

For ideas on how to create a web, here's one example:

Monday, May 6, 2013

Tuesday, May 7th


Students took a quiz about scansion based on a video posted in previous blog post.

The following students still need to take the quiz due to absences:

Section 3:
Brian Rhee
Daniel Lee
Sarah Kim

Section 4:
Daniel Choi
Brian Oh

2. We began our discussion on The Love-song of J. Alfred Prufrock by T.S. Eliot


Re-read the poem. Mark the repetition and make a comment on your copy of the poem regarding the possible use of it.
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